WHEREAS potential Dandelions should have the right, if their parents/guardians and the Kingdom agree, to participate in Talossan cultural life on a limited basis to see whether citizenship appeals to them;El Lexhatx E.13, including subsections 13.1-3, to be replaced by the following text:
QuoteAny child or ward of a Talossan citizen under the age of 14 years may be registered by their Talossan parent or guardian as a "Dandelion-In-Waiting" or Implind, by application to the Secretary of State. To assist them in their future decision as to whether to become Talossan citizens, Implinds may avail themselves of the rights and privileges of prospective citizens, subject to any limits agreed by their Talossan parent or guardian and the Secretary of State.
Is this meant to repeal subsections 13.1-3 as well? Perhaps this should be spelled out more clearly.
Done
In terms of the general CRL proofreading, this appears to pass muster just fine.
I think it also will help cut through potential parental entanglements as well.
And as I am still a member of the CRL, I give this the big tick as well.